Writing prompt: See what happens
My latest book on writing, Keys to Great Writing (catchy title, right?) contains a section devoted to using verbs to animate writing. Author Stephen Wilbers offers a couple of blah examples and then passages from snippets of Hemingway and Fitzgerald’s The Great Gatsby which convey the same meaning but in more powerful and meaningful ways. He then offers this challenge:
Now, how can you, the real you, apply this lesson in your writing? How, for example, might your rewrite this sentence: “News of our boss’s departure affected all of us”? (p 53)
The door closed behind the boss’s secretary. The news of her departure was now official. We worker bees broke into song: the kids sang something with a chorus of “Call me maybe” punctuated with repetitions of “NOT!” An older group sang a rousing rendition of “Bohemian Rhapsody” with a few twists: “Mama mia, mama mia, mama mia, let her go—go—go—GO!”
But for those of us who had known her the longest, it was no contest. We burst forth in jolly peals of “Ding-dong the witch is dead.”
OK. So a little longer than a single sentence. How about: At the news of the boss’s departure, we burst into song.
Anyone else want to give it try?
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