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Death descends

My daughter wrote this poem as a school assignment. I was rather taken aback by the dark imagery but I do think there's a hint of Emily Dickinson in her poem.


Death descends

Death comes when it's least expected

It comes when you are not ready

it comes when a lot remains to be done

And that's how it will come to all of us.

It swoops down upon us

And grabs with icy cold fingers

We will struggle of course

But all attempts will be futile

It will carry us away

And take us to a place we dread

And all that we had, Will be lost to us forever.

Never again to smell the freshness of air

Nor feel the warmth of the sun Nor hear the chirping of birds

Nor taste the sweetness of fruits

Never to see the tall mountains

Never to feel the wind on the skin

Never to hear the streams bubbling

Never to hear the laughter of a child

There will be naught but silence

Naught but darkness!!


I personally think she needs to read more cheerful stuff and less books like Harry Potter and "Power of Five" where young heroes die gruesome heroic deaths while saving the world from nefarious evil villains!!

What do you think?

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MegL wrote on December 13, 2014, 1:10 PM

That's a very adult poem. I can't say that Harry Potter would have provoked this type of poetry in me. Haven't read "Power of Five", so can't comment on that.

bestwriter wrote on December 13, 2014, 6:12 PM

The poem is well written but she has not gone beyond death which is heaven and when she dwells on that subject she will not have these morbid thoughts. At the same time, she is in love with life. emoticon :cool:

BrenndaMarie wrote on December 13, 2014, 6:56 PM

I think you daughter has a lot of talent and is wise beyond her years.

carmela wrote on December 13, 2014, 7:43 PM

going into minds and thoughts of the young is a learning experince and an eye opener for us adults.

scheng1 wrote on December 14, 2014, 12:01 AM

Next time when she grows up, she will see that the most painful thing is when death does not come, and the patients literally rot away in front of us.

Madcanman wrote on December 14, 2014, 6:31 AM

I don't know your daughter's age but I will say this- if she did, indeed write that herself she is one talented young woman. I am a huge fan of darker writing, whether poetry or fiction, and I know from personal experience there are so many people who think that something so dark must signify psychological issues. I say CREATIVITY people! Write on, daughter.

Ruby3881 wrote on December 17, 2014, 5:32 AM

I think she's a very talented young poet, who ought to be encouraged! I can certainly understand your concern at the subject and tone of this piece, but do ask her about it. Sometimes the tone has been set by the teacher, and the assignment is designed to elicit this type of response. I know that my grade ten English teacher had us do an entire unit of poetry with very dark themes like this.